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The clock at the railway station strikes three. A girl in a brown raincoat and with a bag in her hand melts in the shadows of the loggia. Has she been a human once? She stands still, only the coat and her skirt move in an occasional breeze. Like a memory risen from a movie scene.

It is five past three. A pigeon, almost white and busy, flies under the roof and splits the shadows as it disappears into the deeper darkness of the roof structures. Or is it the wind whose wings are sighing?

It is ten past three. The sound of a train breaks the silence folded in shadows and forces the station to materialize. The train stops and the steam cloud dissipates. The sun reflects shapes on the carriages and from them on the flagstones. The girl steps into the train moving only as much as necessary. She looks almost like she could bleed if someone had cut her. She disappears into the dimness of the carriage.

It is quarter past three. The train leaves leaving the station in doubt of its existence in the middle of lights and shadows.
©2004-2008 ~Libahunt
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I wrote this during a school break last spring and translated later into English (feel free to point out mistakes. I can't write even Finnish properly, let alone any other language).

Made some grammatical changes here and there. Thanks goes to my English teacher who kindly checked this and then coloured the whole thing with his red pen (starting to have traumas from that pen). The remaining mistakes are there because in some cases I'm just stubborn and like to think I'm above such things as grammatic.
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~donotkilldemons:icondonotkilldemons: Sep 17, 2004, 11:05:19 AM
I anyway LIKE it, no matter what you say.

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~Stars-of-the-Water:iconStars-of-the-Water: Sep 20, 2004, 6:53:56 PM
Wow...this seems like something in a dream. It also reminds me of a book I read a long time ago. It was called Letters From Rifka and it's about a girl who has to leave Russia with her family because of a war. The train just makes me think of what it might be like for her to leave her home behind. Very interesting! :aww: I'm adding this to my faves! :+fav:
~Libahunt:iconLibahunt: Sep 21, 2004, 3:05:25 AM
Thank you ^^ Have to find that book somewhere, you got me interested :)

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~Stars-of-the-Water:iconStars-of-the-Water: Sep 21, 2004, 6:21:38 AM
You're welcome! :) I need to get a copy too! I would like to read it again. I'm just glad I could remember the title! :giggle:
~donotkilldemons:icondonotkilldemons: Sep 30, 2004, 2:46:39 PM
Oh was me a bad teacher? :hmm: fuck that then me off, please...

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~Libahunt:iconLibahunt: Oct 1, 2004, 12:07:22 AM
Heh, no. He just pointed other things too and explained why they're wrong.

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~D1rty:iconD1rty: Oct 10, 2004, 8:38:50 AM
very interesting work.

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~Libahunt:iconLibahunt: Oct 10, 2004, 12:00:29 PM
Thank you ^^

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~echris1:iconechris1: Oct 17, 2004, 3:42:32 PM
i love the train, such a romantic ideal that has been lost. nice work!